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Jack and Jill went up the hill
to fetch a pail of water
Jack fell down and broke his crown
And Jill came tumbling after.

Up got Jack, and home did trot
As fast as he could caper
He went to bed and bound his head
With vinegar and brown paper.

Jack then died and Jill she cried
And drove a knife inside her
The doctor came and said her name
And her reality became a blur.

Her mother would cry and wonder why
It was with a wall with whom she would chatter
But in Jill’s Head in was Jack instead
And the rest just didn’t matter

She would cut her arm since Jack could charm
Her with the pretty razor.
So blood would drip from the rip
From her skins thin armor

When her mother came round and Jill was not sound
She cried for the girl’s father.
But the razor then came and took the man’s name
From the tongue of Jill’s poor mother

Her father found Jill who in the blood stood still
The girl was filled with laughter
He took her hand and with stern demand
Asked who had done the murder

She shook her head and to him said
“T’was Jack and I who ripped her.”
After the death as quick as a breath
He father took her away forever

And to Humpty was brought by a father distraught
With a sick but smiling daughter
And now Jill dwells inside the cells
Within the Ever After
©2007-2009 ~Leticheecopae
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Author's Comments

For Endling again. Everything after "brown paper" is mine, the first two are the originals. Based for the comic Everafter done by Endling. Go check him out and his comic.

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:icondainen:
Wow, a nice psyco twist to an innocent tale :D

Loved it

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Why thank you. You never know how hard it is to find rhyming -er words.
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true :hmm:
but when i get to that spot, usually try to make "summer" fit :XD:

then hit the dictionary :laughing:

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Good point, then of course summer dosen't exactly fit in here does it....

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Rhyme Zone . com if you're super stuck on a rhyme
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wow. This is one of the best things I've read in a long time. No lie. I don't usually read poetry, but this is great. I love it!

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Whoo! Go Jack and Jill the Rippers! XD

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Thank you.

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Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe:
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe. -Lewis Carroll

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